“Listen, Lian, it was a success overall. You saved some trucks from utter demise and discovered a new kind of creepy corrosive acidput another Gotham crazy away.” [Wait. Didn't Belmont surrender peacefully in this draft? Where did she encounter the acid? Possibly this is not something that would make you stop and think unless you actually read the previous draft though...]
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Date: Sep. 26th, 2010 19:21 (UTC)Mostly right through here:
“Listen, Lian, it was a success overall. You saved some trucks from utter demise and discovered a new kind of creepy corrosive acidput another Gotham crazy away.” [Wait. Didn't Belmont surrender peacefully in this draft? Where did she encounter the acid? Possibly this is not something that would make you stop and think unless you actually read the previous draft though...]